Thursday, April 25, 2013

Poetry Challenge: Lune


 

This blog post is in response to a poetry challenge from Grace (aka Heaven) at Imaginary Garden with Real Toads. The following is quoted from their site:

 


 

On April 25, 2013, we will see a full moon. So, I think it is timely that the poetry form we tackle today is called Lune, which is French for “moon”.

 


 

Robert Kelly, an American poet, invented the Lune poetry form. He felt that adhering to the strict form of Japanese haiku (5-7-5 syllables) in English creates a different poem than the Japanese intention. He invented the Lune to remove these differences, and the only requirement is the 5-3-5 syllables. There are no other rules i.e. no need for a cutting word or punctuation. Rhymes are fine; subject matter is wide open.

 

In his book, Lunes, Robert Kelly has a short foreword:

 

Lunes are small poems that spend half their lives in darkness & half in light. Each lune has thirteen syllables one for each month of the moon’s year.

 

a minute ago

that tree was

still full of blackbirds

 

~0~

In writing the lune poem, be guided that the intention is to make the minimal reverberate to the maximum. Each lune is a separate poem.

 

 

This is the end of the quotation and the explanation from Imaginary Garden with Real Toads.

Remember each lune is a separate poem.  Here are eight of mine:

 

Writing Poems

Words mutter themselves

into poems

saying less and more

 

Loving You

Kisses light the day

fanning flames

for tonight’s bonfire

 

Dream Time

I pull the blankets up

to my chin

as the night dreams me

 

Dawn

Spooning we awake

robin song

throbbing in our veins

 

Greeting the Day

Dream-edge of waking

murmurs grace

morning sings praises

 

Morning Blues

Coffee in my cup

squills in bloom

morning sings the blues

 

Coffee

The smell of coffee

a perfume

my home wears all day

 

Evening Song

An hour ago

my glass held

wine and dusk and you

 

The photo and words for the eight lune poems are copyright ©Carol Steel.  If you would like to see what others have written, click here.  Words shown in colour on this post will take you to another site with additional information, if you click on them.

 

 

 

14 comments:

aprille said...

Delightful. Each and everyone of these titbits of poetry.
And together they work beautifully as a snapshot of your day.
'squills' :maybe what we over here call scilla? The titchy blue or white hyacinthlike bulbs?

Carol Steel said...

Thank you Aprille. Yes, snapshots is what they are. And yes, squills are part of the scilla family. Thanks for visiting.

Loredana Donovan said...

These are all very beautiful, romantic, magical. You did a wonderful job with this form. I especially like the line, "the night dreams me." Lovely photo, too. Thank you for your nice comment on my blog :)

Carol Steel said...

Thank you Loredana. Magical and romantic were my aims. I'm happy you visited and that you liked that line. "The night dreams me" was a favourite of mine too.

Grace said...

A beautiful bouquet of lunes ~

I love them all from the muttering words to the bonfire, smell of coffee and lastly that romantic glass of evening song ~

Thank you for participating in our Sunday's challenge and nice to meet you ~

(aka Heaven)

Mama Zen said...

These are gorgeous! My favorite was "Coffee." That sounds just like my house!

Susie Clevenger said...

These are beautiful. You have brought romance and mystery together flawlessly. Thank you for visiting my page.

Carol Steel said...

Thank you Grace, for your comments and for your challenge.

Carol Steel said...

Thank you Mama Zen. Praise from you is high praise indeed.

Carol Steel said...

Thank you Susie. I enjoyed your lunes and am happy you liked mine.

Jane Tims said...

Hi. I like 'loving you' and 'dream time'... oh, and 'coffee'. Thanks for the information on haiku/lune. I find them very difficult to write. Jane

Rambling Woods said...

Oh I love these and admire your ability to do these...Michelle

Carol Steel said...

Hi Jane,
I'm happy you liked the lunes. I find the haiku a challenging form but the lune seems easier.

Carol Steel said...

Thank you Michelle.