Tuesday, July 17, 2012

The Trap




The Trap

I am down again.
Crack of the chain pulled taut,
spray of grittle, as gravity weighs
down again.
Pain triggers
humility.

I don’t relish having to learn
and relearn the lesson.
“Loosen the chain,
before you step out
or
it will rip you, trip you,
trip you…
again and again.”

I flick aside the gravel
that claims my knees,
now planted in tailings.

My skin swells
around the wounds,
and I hear again,
“Loosen the chain
before you step out,
step out,
step,
out.”

This poem is a response to The Sunday Whirl at   http://sundaywhirl.wordpress.com 
The Wordle is #65 for July 15, 2012.
The words to be used to create a poem are: humility, relishes, trigger, flicks, swells, gravity, refrain, crack, chain, plant, grittle*, spray, claim.
Grittle = to grind coarsely or the result of a rough grind.
Words shown in different colours will take you to another website, with additional information, if you click on them. 

12 comments:

Veronica Roth said...

Really good Carol. Terrifically emotive. Those chains...very few people spun those chains into a light-hearted poem. Well done to use grittle; I couldn’t do it. :)

Elizabeth said...

As I read and reread this, I thought of certain memories that become traps, how they crack the present moment and drag one down and down again. Tightly written and very evocative. Have had a few similar moments.

Elizabeth

miskmask said...

I enjoyed your poem very much. The photo certainly enhanced it. Thank you for visiting and reading my poem, Carol, and I look forward to reading more of your work.

brenda w said...

Nicely penned, Carol. Your interpretation of the words feels unique to me. This is a strong write, and I love the image that you selected to head it.

Carol Steel 5050 said...

Thanks Veronica. We spend our lives in many self-imposed chains and don't realize that we imagine our own limits. And then move in and stay there. Thanks for your comment.

Carol Steel 5050 said...

Thank you Elizabeth. I appreciate your comment. All sorts of situations in life become traps, if we don't bring them to awareness and deal with them. Part of being human, I have learned.

Carol Steel 5050 said...

Dear miskmask,

Thank you for your comment on my poem and the photo I found on Google images. I enjoyed your poem as well.

Carol Steel 5050 said...

Thank you Brenda W for your comment on my interpretation and my write. I appreciate both very much.

Mary said...

This is intense writing..how many times we know something 'loosen the chain' but don't do it and thus pay the consequences!

Carol Steel 5050 said...

Hi Mary,
Thanks for visiting my blog and for the comment.

teri said...

Carol-Sorry I missed your wordle last week! I see you you did not let the grittle get you down!

Carol Steel 5050 said...

Hi Teri,

I do enjoy the wordles. They are fun and sometimes quite a challenge.