When I Was Eight
Bundles of lightning
bolts of thunder.
The sounds shook
over an ash horizon,
in damp corners,
as a storm climbed
the husk of sky.
still the scars
and bright memory of gold
The poem is written in response to The Sunday Whirl poetry prompt. In Wordle # 75, we are asked to write a poem using these words: bolts, ash, corners, damp, climbed, shook, trapped, remain, bundles, storm, bring, husk. If you’d like to read what others have written, click here for a link. Text in colour red will take you to another website with additional information, if you click on it. Photo was taken by my sister and brother-in-law. Words are copyright ©Carol Steel.
Beautiful work, Carol. I love the ending...the scars and the bright memory of gold... Age and experience explore that young angst. Well done.
I enjoyed the choice of wordle words this week. And they instantly called out this memory.
Beautiful! Love the imagery.
Thank you Janet. I appreciate your comment.
Beautiful image and I love your piece!
marvelous ! xoxo wendy
It's always good to get feedback. I'm happy you loved it.
Thanks Wendy. I always love to hear from you.
That's a really lovely sky!
Your words have done it justice too. I love 'the storm climbed the husk of sky'
The sounds shaking over an ash horizon is very vivid too.
Lovely poem :)
The lovely photo was taken by my sister and brother-in-law on a recent vacation they took to PEI. Thanks for feedback on the images in my poem. I tried to use the words given, in different from their usual ways.
I just read something the other day about Pompeii - and this peace reminds me of that. Nice write.
A wonderfully colorful piece - memories well told.
Thanks Jules. I hadn't thought of Pompeii at all when I was writing but now I can see that in the poem too.
Thank you Tumblewords for your comment. I enjoyed your contribution to Wordle 75 as well.
It was powerful.
Wonderfully told Carol - well done.
Thanks Anna. I really enjoyed your poem from the same Wordle prompt. Loved the way you handled the images of falling, flying, floating.
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